Can someone tell me how to improve this song?

[DenzuSilvery]

Hi everyone

So I made a cover with my other utau Onzu and to me it does not sound right I loved Denzu's version of Ghost Rule but Onzu's voice seems odd when he sings it any advice on how to improve it would be welcome I will add the links for comparison

Onzu's version


Denzu's version

 

[RaccoonButler]

It sounds like Onzu is slightly off time in his cover, move his vocals behind slightly.

Also I think I'm wrong, but he sounds a little off tune? Is there a possibility you moved the ust one note up by accident? My ear tuning isn't the best though so don't take my word on that, it's probably just cus it's off time

But Onzu does sound like he's singing too high, maybe moving him down an octave might improve how he sounds.

 

[DenzuSilvery]

thank you I will give it a try Hopefully it will sound better