critique on original song, please :D

amaterasu miya

Ruko's Ruffians
Defender of Defoko
i made a song, i'm quite proud of it, but i'd love opinions of others!

here is the song :3
https://soundcloud.com/miya-the-matryoshka/utau-originalpomona-ito-forgotten-system

forgive the overly loud vocals ^.^'

woohoo for going overboard with crazy vocodex xD