Critique this Engrish ぷるいいず!

ecko419

Teto's Territory
i need this to be critique, im not in a hurry but having feedback sooner will be help for me so i can slowly finish this and help on the engrish part too!

im sorry if you can hear the vocal b/c i have a new computer and it doesn't have the proper setting, but yeah

This is my Utau wished i could use another one instead of him but i don't want to find the other vb again.

Song: BiOhazard
Originally by: Circus-p
Sang by: aiko kikyuune
Singing it: Erikku Act1