Critique This UST, Please!

PikaPokket

Momo's Minion
Defender of Defoko
so, here it is:
https://soundcloud.com/thepepperman/ust-wip-4

This is actually my first UST with multiple parts...
Well it's really my third, but it's the best of th three...
I think I got the tempo right, and aside from mixing errors and rest length issues, I hope it sounds a little decent ;-;
It's also missing the rap parts because I'm hopeless at the rap part, and my attempts to do those parts threw off the tempo of the real UST
So, if I can get some critique or even someone to help me make the rap parts, I would be really happy :3
 

Senor Henry

Momo's Minion
This is probably kinda late...
I'm no good at knowing whether a UST is good or not but I can try to do the rap part if you would like me to. :uhuhu:
example
^Here's an example in case you wanted to hear before accepting or declining. :smile:
 

PikaPokket

Momo's Minion
Defender of Defoko
Thread starter
thanks a bunch :smile:
But I also have to warn you- the rapping is kinda intense and it's in korean, so it'll have to work with japanese phonemes. I would really appreciate you taking this part, though :smile: