Critique?

ScuroKun

Teto's Territory
[soundcloud]http://soundcloud.com/shiria-1/lll-lll-wip[/soundcloud]
I was wondering if anyone could critique this. I wasn't sure if the mixing effect was too much, and was wondering if the pitchbends sounded okay. This is my second time using Ritsu, so I'm sorry if it sounds awkward or something orz;;;