I think the oto could use some slight tweaking perhaps, but by and large its fine. Some syllables sound like there's a bit of a gap between the consonant and the vowel before it. You may either want to be more liberal with your overlap, or you may want to move the left blank further right. If you have the oto set up such that the initial fade in of the consonant is still included, cutting that off with the left blank by moving it to the right will help the gappiness.
The pronunciation is generally good.
The big thing I notice is a lot of the consonants pop, especially stops (p, b, t, d, k, g) which are most prone to popping due to extra air blowing past the mic. If you're not using a pop filter, I'd strongly suggest using one. You can makeshift one out of some pantyhose stretched over an embroidery ring, but you'll have to jerry rig some way of holding it up. (imo its far easier and much more worth it to spend ~$15 on a proper pop filter) Whatever you do, just don't do anything that involves anything touching the mic (i.e., putting socks over the mic)