Is the melody for this original boring/strange?

RaccoonButler

Founder of The Church of Mawarine Shuu
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I have been trying to finish an older song I wrote and I’ve been a little unsure how to approach it since it’s been so long, the plan I had for the song is almost a little foreign to me (That’s what happens when you procrastinate, oops) I don’t entirely remember the chords or a lot of my original idea.

As a result, I worry the melody might be strange on the song/ boring? I am a little unsatisfied with it, but I also feel I might be biased against it since I wrote it, LEL

(The really bad midi piano/vibraphone is the stand-in for the vocal melody. It wasn’t really like, properly mixed in so hopefully it can still be distinguished ok. Though it might not portray the polyphonic portions well)


https://clyp.it/srq5ybgz

Anyway, I would appreciate any feedback on how the melody sounds to you.
I honestly feel iffy about the mix too, so honestly feedback on anything I wouldn’t mind either ^^;;

Thanks for any opinions/feedback !
 

Amzsie

Ruko's Ruffians
Defender of Defoko
This is gonna be the worst review ever but, I dont think the melody sounds boring or strange at all! Im not sure how to describe it, but I really like it! I'd be interested in seeing the finished product ^^
 
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elizaditton

Teto's Territory
(From my understanding, this is the roadmap of your track (although I'm most likely wrong somehow lol) : Intro (0:00), verse 1 (0:18), verse 2 (0:32), prechorus (0:46), chorus (0:59), bridge (1:35), chorus 2 (2:00), outro (2:35))

First of all this sounds super good, and I really like the way your mix sounds~ ;v; The melody of the verse gives the song a sort of sylistic robot feel (at least in my opinion, and I think it fits pretty well). I feel like the addition of harmony when the verse repeats at (0:32) keeps the listener interested in the melody of the verse until it changes into the prechorus. ouo)b The prechorus, chorus, and bridge sound good, too. I especially like the chorus. (Also I'm a sucker for key changes so the final chorus is p great imo :3c)

¯\_(ツ)_/¯ I don't really have any suggestions or anything, I think it sounds good so far! (I've only been making music for two years tho so I'm not really skilled or seasoned by any means heh ;; so this is more so the opinion of a listener as opposed to the opinion of a musician ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ hope I helped a little tho ;v; )
 
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slashhearts

Ruko's Ruffians
Defender of Defoko
i think kei hit the nail on the head, but i just wanted to offer my support and say that this sounds really good! i really like the mood dissonance in the bridge compared to everything else, it really adds to the dynamic quality, especially with how it leads into the next part. i'm really excited to hear the final product!!
 
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RaccoonButler

Founder of The Church of Mawarine Shuu
Defender of Defoko
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Aaa thank you guys ! I’m glad it’s not as bad as I initially thought it was, LEL. I was worried that it might be disjointed or ugly sounding but I’m glad it’s not so-
I greatly appreciate the helpful input ^^
 

Alessandra

Ruko's Ruffians
Defender of Defoko
I have been trying to finish an older song I wrote and I’ve been a little unsure how to approach it since it’s been so long, the plan I had for the song is almost a little foreign to me (That’s what happens when you procrastinate, oops) I don’t entirely remember the chords or a lot of my original idea.

As a result, I worry the melody might be strange on the song/ boring? I am a little unsatisfied with it, but I also feel I might be biased against it since I wrote it, LEL

(The really bad midi piano/vibraphone is the stand-in for the vocal melody. It wasn’t really like, properly mixed in so hopefully it can still be distinguished ok. Though it might not portray the polyphonic portions well)


https://clyp.it/srq5ybgz

Anyway, I would appreciate any feedback on how the melody sounds to you.
I honestly feel iffy about the mix too, so honestly feedback on anything I wouldn’t mind either ^^;;

Thanks for any opinions/feedback !
Hmmm... actually I find this interesting... the accompaniment is really interesting... yeah, I think you can analyse the melody just listening and try to change the parts before the first line/ad harmonies. Is it ok?
 

RaccoonButler

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Hmmm... actually I find this interesting... the accompaniment is really interesting... yeah, I think you can analyse the melody just listening and try to change the parts before the first line/ad harmonies. Is it ok?

Ah, I’m unsure what you mean :0 In regards to the instrumental, I should add more you think?
 

Awaclus

Ruko's Ruffians
Defender of Defoko
I don't think anything is wrong with the melody per say, but I think the mix needs a bit of work. First of all, it sounds like you're pretty excited about putting a big reverb on everything, but I would recommend against doing that because it makes the whole thing lose a lot of clarity especially in the low and low mid range. If you want an echo, a subtle delay is sometimes a better idea because it doesn't cause the lows to build up the same way, but mostly, you can just turn off a lot of the reverb plugins and save them only for a couple of instruments that you need to sound huge in the mix, such as the drums (but even then I think you could definitely afford to turn down that drum reverb quite a bit).

There are also a lot of instruments in the mid range frequencies that mask each other, so try EQing them differently to create more separation between the different elements and try to look for any kind of content in each individual track that doesn't really contribute anything meaningful towards the mix and try to get rid of it as much as you can (e.g. the clap has a lot of lows and low mids that it really doesn't need, at least not that much, so you can turn those frequencies down from the clap to make more room for e.g. the bass guitar that actually has lows and low mids that are contributing something useful).
 

Alessandra

Ruko's Ruffians
Defender of Defoko
I have been trying to finish an older song I wrote and I’ve been a little unsure how to approach it since it’s been so long, the plan I had for the song is almost a little foreign to me (That’s what happens when you procrastinate, oops) I don’t entirely remember the chords or a lot of my original idea.

As a result, I worry the melody might be strange on the song/ boring? I am a little unsatisfied with it, but I also feel I might be biased against it since I wrote it, LEL

(The really bad midi piano/vibraphone is the stand-in for the vocal melody. It wasn’t really like, properly mixed in so hopefully it can still be distinguished ok. Though it might not portray the polyphonic portions well)


https://clyp.it/srq5ybgz

Anyway, I would appreciate any feedback on how the melody sounds to you.
I honestly feel iffy about the mix too, so honestly feedback on anything I wouldn’t mind either ^^;;

Thanks for any opinions/feedback !
No, I mean the melody goes around quite the same notes... so I think you can variate... but if you want, I could help you