Critique Requested [UTAU] Unhappy Birthday [Kohaku Merry Acrobat]

hopeandjoy

Ruko's Ruffians
Defender of Defoko


it's my 22nd birthday today. ...yay?
Title: Unhappy Birthday (アンハッピーバースデイ)
Music/Lyrics: Kairiki Bear (かいりきベア)
Art: Nou (のう)
Singer: Kohaku Merry Acrobat (戯白メリー Acrobat)
UST: Nick and half a head
Translation and Subtitles: AngelSubs