so, I've just written my first serious original, and I need opinions. this is my first time doing music from scratch, so don't er.. punch me in the face- but i do need critiques.
as for the instrumental, that may take a while with me
(used that one amaing deplore bank because best utau ever amirite- but seriously amazing bank im in love)
Lyrics:
Konichiwa, hello to today!
I am always happy when skies are out to play!
Konichiwa, hello to today!
Being around you always makes my day!
But today you are not here
and oh how i fear
the person I hold dear is definitely not near...
oh where have you gone?
I want you back.
But where have you gone?
oh wait, oh right... you left me long ago.
Konichiwa... hello to today...
Song: https://clyp.it/h5zbegcx
so yeah... opinions?
as for the instrumental, that may take a while with me
(used that one amaing deplore bank because best utau ever amirite- but seriously amazing bank im in love)
Lyrics:
Konichiwa, hello to today!
I am always happy when skies are out to play!
Konichiwa, hello to today!
Being around you always makes my day!
But today you are not here
and oh how i fear
the person I hold dear is definitely not near...
oh where have you gone?
I want you back.
But where have you gone?
oh wait, oh right... you left me long ago.
Konichiwa... hello to today...
Song: https://clyp.it/h5zbegcx
so yeah... opinions?
