ザ 死んだ | The Dead | Za Shinda

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  1. Kitsuyeo

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    This Poem Is The Sequel To My First Poem, The Evil.

    From The View Of Denki Utadenwa



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    The knife had penetrated, but no blood shed
    No matter how many times I cut the flesh, it did not effect me

    This was why I was in hell
    I had eternal life

    I looked down at her carcass
    The sour scent bleached the already distasteful air

    Eternal life I didn't ask for
    Nothing could kill me

    Nothing could possibly relieve me of this life
    Not even the strongest of forces



    Back in my hidden away room
    I tried everything

    I filled the room with deadly gas
    Yet I could breathe

    I slit my wrists
    Yet they did not bleed

    I hung myself with a dirty rope
    Yet my neck did not crush

    "Someone please take my life... I beg..."



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    Please leave your thoughts about it, and if i should do a squel to this as well
     
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  3. The_Fish_God

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    woah, very intense and deep, and depressing XD

    This is really good, I like it! The end gets really deep where it says

     
  4. Kitsuyeo

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    I loved writing that part yey lol thank u, Oppa Kyun~!
     

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